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Unread 04-17-2011, 05:16 AM
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Fun and delightful. I love lines 3 and 4. I also like the enjambment at the stanza break. That enjambment is a typical stand-up comedian's device and the line itself feels very familiar, but in the context of a sonnet it feels fresh.
I agree with Sam on "reservoirs"; I could have wished for another word. The irregularities in the meter work well for the most part, except in L7, at least in my opinion. There is some nice alliteration and nice assonance in the poem; and I was delighted with the internal rhyme of "comfor-TED and "bed" -- maybe more of a sight rhyme to some, but I could hear it.
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