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Unread 04-17-2011, 07:35 AM
Jean L. Kreiling Jean L. Kreiling is offline
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Absolutely delightful!

I might rewrite L10 for smoother meter, something like "Just spending my own money might be nice," and I think that a comma before "pronto" might give that word appropriate emphasis.

But what a perfectly argued, well-crafted dismissal!

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Jean
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