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I love the rhyme scheme the poet uses in this love sonnet (abab, cdecde, fgfg), but that’s not the only imaginative or admirable aspect to it.

This might interest readers:
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=iJKkqC8JVXk.

As Sam says, this needs some basic housekeeping, but retaining some of the extra spacing in for effect. Maybe:


She thinks there’s no more deadly word than and
(as in and Juliet). The moon and sea
are up to their old tricks. It should be banned,
she says, this syllable of tragedy.

He asks her       (Dido and)      why women fall
for liars. In reply she sings You’ve got
no heart, Johnny, and I do love you so
.
Desire’s catastrophe lies in such small
conjunctions       (Bonnie and).       A speckled knot
of snakes is winding through her hair, although

she seems oblivious       (and Heloise).
He plucks a reed and coos a lazy air.
She walks away between the sleeping trees
to tell the moon it has no business there.
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