This sonnet really grew on me. On first and second readings, I found it interesting, but less than clear--partly because of what others have noted about punctuation and italicization, so I hope the author will fix that . . .
. . . because I understand now how clever and cutting and rich this is. It's essentially a sonnet about the dangers of "and"! I did immediately zero in on a line that Cally liked, too: "Desire’s catastrophe lies in such small / conjunctions"--yummy.
I wish there were a way for "and" to appear in the very last line--or maybe even "und" . . .
The ideas are very finely considered, but I do think that this sonnet proves how important tiny technical details can be in the impression a poem makes.
Best,
Jean
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