My issue with this poem is that the sonnet form is probably too long for what the poem actually conveys. It does a delightful job of getting to its point (i.e.: good imagery etc.), but when the ultimate trope of this poem is, "Who am I to think I'm important", I think it can be done with a lot less chaff.
In a way, I think the poem takes itself a bit too seriously and is a bit too contrived for its own good.
I'm also not a fan of the brackets across the last three lines -- it seems very untidy and wholly unnecessary. Surely a simple colon would suffice?
There's a lot to like about this, to be sure, but something strikes me as a bit too inauthentic for me to call it a "great poem".
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