The idea of parlaying colour-blindness into “different visions” of the world to the extent that they might cause a mother to worry about a rift in the mother/child relationship has good possibilities. And this poem expresses such a mother’s concern quite well.
However, most of the poem is founded on differences in colour perceptions of a couch, sweatpants, and a carpet line. Without a deeper examination of the implications of those differences, it labours to make the development convincing. By L10 it becomes a bit expository.
L12-14 raise it to a new level, but late in the game.
The epigraph may come across as a circumvention of the sonnet’s line limitation. I would have liked it better as part of the poem.
John
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