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Unread 04-22-2011, 01:16 PM
Adam Elgar Adam Elgar is offline
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I think the octave blows hot and cold – hot in lines 1, 3, the Wyatt allusion and again in lines 7-8. Rather a bumpy ride, but the good bits are very good. And then in the sestet I feel I’m in very good hands. Bitter and sweet. Yes, “off” should go in line 14. Metrically better and just punchier.
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