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Unread 05-27-2011, 08:15 AM
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Very nice, but reversing S4 & 5 would improve the logical progress and qualify S6's opening But.

you're only just beginning now to grow, is an exemplary instance of triple redundancy. Only just, just now or only now might pass, but only just now is unforgivable.

Peter
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