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Unread 05-28-2011, 02:24 PM
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I share the sense that this is perhaps ninety percent of the way to where it should be. I wanted to sub in "as" and "through" for the first words of S2 L1 and 2, respectively. S5 L2 may as well be labelled "padding" - it really needs attention. Otherwise, I thought it was enjoyable enough.

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