I'm finding it very hard to comment on the poems. In every poem so far, form dominates over content, which makes me hesitant to say much and above all hesitant to criticize. Repetition is such an important element of the form that it doesn't seem fair to be too critical, and besides, what kind of criteria outside of metre and adherence to form could I use in that respect? Well, today it struck me that progression is possibly a good criterion. And if I apply it to this poem, I find the poem works extremely well for six lines, but that the last two simply aren't needed content-wise since they don't take the poem further and make it progress, though of course they're necessary for the form. I also decided that flow was important in French repeating forms, and this poem flows pretty well in my opinion.
One of the best triolets I've ever read is written by an Eratospherian and has a wonderful progression and is also very moving. The triolet in this thread is really good, I like it a lot and I applaud it. But it would have been even better if it kept progressing, right to the finish.
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