Thanks, Donna.
John, I suppose something like 'muse' could substitute for 'keen' if you agree with Susan's point?
Minu, ingenious. Maybe 'escape' better than 'escapism' in Line 2? (Typo in rebarbative in Line 3).
Wonder about the punctuation of the last line. Would it go better as, "That is why, I guess, he decided to do nothing except sleeping and dreaming, and, finally, decided to stop breathing at all."
The deadline is nigh - good luck to us all.
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