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Unread 11-01-2011, 02:34 PM
Jerome Betts Jerome Betts is offline
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Thanks, Donna.

John, I suppose something like 'muse' could substitute for 'keen' if you agree with Susan's point?

Minu, ingenious. Maybe 'escape' better than 'escapism' in Line 2? (Typo in rebarbative in Line 3).

Wonder about the punctuation of the last line. Would it go better as, "That is why, I guess, he decided to do nothing except sleeping and dreaming, and, finally, decided to stop breathing at all."

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