Jayne, I can't help feeling that 'grieving' is wrong. The rest of the poem sounds like the kid talking (though I knw it's the adult) but grieving sees to me to sound a false note. But perhaps I hate the word too much bnecause of 'the grieving process' and suchlike. I've never myself actally USED the word in ordinary life, though it's true I may have in a poem.
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