Hi Martin,
Do you mean
Red Mars is much too raw. ?
My first thought was, Oh no, it's too long - but ha! this isn't the usual '16 lines max' brief, is it?
(I haven't counted, but I'm assuming it's fewer than 150 words.)
'No whale would ever fin' is a bit ...um... Ouch, sorry. And we also spell it 'pricey', though I doubt that matters an awful lot.
Good to see you getting your name in
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