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Unread 11-30-2011, 11:20 AM
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Oh, so do I - miss the repetition I mean. And where did the sheep come from? Totally rhyme-driven, I think. What has happened now is that the little scenario that the poem showed me has disappeared.

It was like this: our inept photographer is showing someone (his light o' love, perhaps) a picture that he has taken of her. When she shows distress at his ineptitude, he blusters - then tries to tell her he can make it better...

Could you try something like:

The shot is lovely - dark and deep - (if that's not too cheeky!)
Ignore the sore thumb - do not weep,
For I can crop this in my sleep (x2)

Do Merkins use the expression "sore thumb" for an obvious intrusion? I do - and I bet Tessa does, too.

http://en.wiktionary.org/wiki/stick_...e_a_sore_thumb

Last edited by Ann Drysdale; 11-30-2011 at 11:37 AM. Reason: Aha!
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