[Martin Rocek]

Only nits--I think it would be better without "Vampire"
in the title--the image is clear enough, but I prefer not
to be told in advance. Also, I wish that in S1, the b-rhyme could
be fixed, but I assume the poet struggled with that and couldn't
make it work.

The way every line is end-stopped is a bit jarring; I haven't
decided if that is a defect or a deliberate way of enhancing
the coldness of the piece.

Over all, a powerful sonnet.

Martin

p.s Gail, I saw an investment banker.