I love the title, mainly because I once stayed at the Ritz Carlton in Laguna Niguel, overlooking the Pacific. It's by far the poshest hotel I've ever spent a night in - but there wasn't a vampire in sight, I'm glad to say!
If it was my poem, and because of the repetition, I'd be inclined to make the small change from 'you're' to 'you are':
if I'm compelled to say you're looking well,
you are compelled to act as if alive
and spread your death to others to survive.
Enjoyed it, though, for its originality.
Jayne
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