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Unread 04-29-2012, 02:40 PM
conny conny is offline
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it's all a bit glib, but for a shallow, insincere subject i guess
it kinda fits. Its a good draft but i think it reads like its not had
a chance to develop.

which makes it all a bit disjointed somehow. l.5/6 and the dead
and beauty turned into style, i don't really get, and why are they
blind? dunno.
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