From the 6th line on, I like this poem a lot, and I think I understand how the first part is going about where it's trying to go. But lines 2-5 don't quite do it -- the off-handedness is just a little too off-hand, the attack just a bit too oblique. Still, I'll remember these images, and the feeling evoked by the end. 'They want in.' How wrong and sad, and beautiful this is.
Ed
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