I think this one has interesting resonances. I don't really see the point of the L12 tetrameter, but the anapestic substitutions bothered me less than they have bothered some. I like the way "fellow traveler" picks up the allusion to Communism, as the "cold" alludes to the cold war, as well as the literal cold. I enjoyed the repetition of "That moves," which really captures the astonishment of the child. And I like that the child is both impressed by the father's statements and (as an adult) predicting a later drift away from the father's opinions. In short, I see a lot more than just a slice of life here.
Susan
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