Some vibrant images of the outdoors and good use of extended metaphor. The title, though a clever pun, trivializes the poem.
I find there are too many "that"s (4, I believe), making the poem sound stilted in places.
And though I like the sentiment of two-heads-are-better-than-one (as far as fire-building/relationships are concerned), every ending is, indeed, "the same", as stated in L5.
Enjoyed, but needs some work.
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