Im into family poems so like this a lot -- with some possible tweaks...
Normally I'd avoid exclamations but I think this reallycalls for one--at age five you would be awed by this , e.g.
that moves. That moves! It's 1957.
I'd also delete the word Russians--not needed as we know who put the sputnik up
and that might help with the bread line
My father says that they have leapt ahead.
By building missiles, not by baking bread
the godless souls have marred the face of heaven.
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