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Unread 07-29-2012, 08:06 PM
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Excellent, Brendan!

I'm not sure, but maybe in the last line "I ate them" instead of "I ate the plums" would avoid a five-beat reading of the line and place a proper emphasis on "This"?

Janice, thanks.
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