Ralph-- yes this is very well done...but not intimidating at all! When I decided to write a sestina (months ago) this was the one that showed me (one way, anyway) how it can be done.
I think it's the Iambic Tet. Not only does the shorter line take some of the edge off the repetitiousness of the sestina, but also allows for many more enjambments, so the end-words can appear in different parts of a sentence.
This should be the model in the workshops.
(...my sestina got published.)
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