Ah, I see what you mean, Brian.
Sorry, I missed the placing of 'scratched' at the end of the line. I thought the off-rhymes were just random, not having paid proper attention. Duh!
Your poem is similar to one I posted on Metrical last year, called Writer's Block:
They said to me, “Write something. Not in rhyme.”
Screw that, I thought, I haven’t got the ti inclination
to write in ‘free’; I always write rhymed verse.
This was anathema; there’s nothing wor more dreadful
than being forced to go against the grain.
It’s put me under quite a lot of strai pressure.
I told them I would have a go. (Some hope!)
I can’t think of a thing; I feel a do right fool.
It ought to be a simple thing to write
‘sans rhyme’. I stayed up half the bloody nigh way through the late film;
came up with no ideas at all. I guess
I’ve made a hash of it, a total mes muck-up.
I’ll stick to what I’m good at, from now on;
accept, at times like this, the Muse has g disappeared
but when it does return, I’ll try to plan
a poem in free verse which doesn’t sca have a decent metre.
Jayne
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