[Brian Allgar]

John, just a couple of small points.

I've always understood that Suetonius is pronounced "Sway-toe-nyus", but you seem to be counting either "Su-e" or "ni-us" as two syllables. Maybe it's the correct Latin pronunciation? If not, you could simply make it

Of Roman boys, or else Suetonius lies

And I'm having difficulty construing the two following lines. Is there some punctuation missing (e.g. a comma after "rough"), or am I being dense?

Harsh, hideous hair of devils, rank and rough
Light lamplit hair on girlish arms... enough!

Also, "Light lamplit hair" is on first reading a bit confusing (light/lit). What about "Fine" instead of "Light", or even "Fine downy hair"? But there I go, interfering again. And "lamplit" is very good.

There are so many splendid lines, but two of my favourites are:

The hair that grows on masturbators' palms

and

The pallid, hairy legs of kilted Jocks

Yet I wish I hadn't read it, because you seem to have snaffled the entire stock of historical hair, and now I can't think of anything for myself! "Brightness falls from the hair".

Brian