Yes - that's a cracker, John.
Lance - I think yours would be enlivened by emphasis on the oldy-ballady element that creeps in with Nile-a. (That took me jogging on Shakespeare's foot-path way and henting the occasional stile-a.)
I wonder about bride-o and abide-o? And dare you go with dream-um and cream-um, or can anyone else who thinks we're onto a good idea come up with a better repetend?
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