I love John and Douglas's above; and yours, Lance, is a novel notion I'd not come across! (Is it your playful fancy, or did the Leninists really view the leonine-locked as alien and with such a-leniency?)
However as a neophyte (I may be reading clumsily) I offer that:
S2L4 is a syllable long (could use "everyone's" instead of "everybody's"?)
S4L4 ditto (could use "spoils" instead of "will spoil"?)
S5L3 ditto (I trip up on "he's"; could it maybe be left out?)
S5L4 ditto (maybe instead "A tantra-drooling gnu-ru on the make" ?)
Your "gnu-ru" I like; an imagination-catching and concise coining!
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