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Unread 11-17-2012, 07:15 AM
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Originally Posted by Jerome Betts View Post
Oh rue the day that youthful thatch
No longer seems quite up to scratch!
As passing years reveal your scalp,
A shiny pale-pink mini-Alp,
Worse still, a sort of wrinkled corm,
You find it kept you dry and warm
Without recourse to things like caps
To cover all the growing gaps,
And Berlusconi-style head-jobs,
Those domes they pit with small red blobs,
Comb-overs, costly French toupees
That slip in disconcerting ways
Or generate a prickly heat.
As Anon said, and I’ll repeat,
Designed for town and country wear,
There is no substitute for hair.
Jerome,
This is great, remininiscent of Swift. One change you might consider is to substitute "Anon declared" for "As Anon said" in Line 14, to strengthen the meter, and support your excellent finishing couplet.
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