Jim,
This is funny and typically Hayesian. The joke unfolds smoothly and plausibly, without major artificiality or distortion, setting up the punch line well and delivering it nicely.
I had trouble getting into the flow at the beginning, which seems to me to require an odd emphasis on “It”, and then leaping over a few small rocks to get to the much smoother phrase “but God had one last chore —“
I played with an alternative such as this:
“Day Six. His work was almost done, but God had one last chore —“, and replacing ‘got’ with ‘obtained’ in line 5.
Typo in ‘acquired’.
I enjoyed this, and Tim’s idea of a collection of versified jokes is welcome. I look forward to reading the forthcoming contributions.
Jerry
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