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Unread 02-23-2013, 06:33 AM
Brian Allgar Brian Allgar is offline
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As my comment implied, I had an inkling who it might be, John. Perhaps you could call it "Guess who?", although they don't seem to retain titles in the Speccie.

I think "boudoir" would be better. "Boodwar" seems a little heavy-handed, not quite the Whitworth lightness of touch that we have come to expect.

If you cut a stanza, I'd make it the third. There can be no question of losing the Mars bar, and "a whatsit to stick in your loo" is a stronger ending than "a dingus for streaking your hair".

I'm glad you liked my lttle piece. As you can imagine, although it was over sixty years ago, it's a scene I've never forgotten. Of course, my uncle and aunt are long gone, but they live on in my tale!
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