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Originally Posted by John Whitworth
Good fun but too long. I know it says 150 words but Lucy is thinking prose. No poem of more than sixteen lines will get a look in because it's too long on the Speccie page. So you have to cut it to sixteen lines whatever the rules say. In my opinion.
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John,
Thanks for the tip. I can cut the first two verses without too much problem, though I like the rhymes in S1. Darn it, this clocked in at 147 words, too. Now I see why sonnets are so popular for these comps.
I must thank you for your mention of the British nudist mag with the title "Health and Efficiency", which was the sole inspiration for this. I recalled
Cheaper by the Dozen (both the book and the first movie), and figured the Gilbreths were pretty "efficient" in the bedroom. By the way, he dropped dead on a train platform at age 55, but Mrs. G. lived well into her nineties. Most of the kids made it to their eighties, too.