Ah, sterling effort from Ann! Sod pulchritude indeed. I wanted a colon or period at the end of L12 instead of a comma, and thought perhaps the darling buds line could use a comma or two, but tastes vary. Great take on the brief.
But can it compete with the Clampetts? This has been such a fun thread. I've never tried to write one of these, and am a bit disheartened by the competition, but perhaps I'll mull it over. Don't hold your rhymes-with-death.
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