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Unread 04-17-2005, 10:51 AM
Steven Schroeder Steven Schroeder is offline
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Originally posted by Yolanda Cruz:
Fireflies

Glowing
orbs; small spirits
flitting through fragrant pines.
Silent, I watch the girl watch them,
entranced.


This is a Cinquain from the Amaze Journal. How can you not be impressed with this?
Well, it's not very good, for starters. Glowing orbs? Small spirits? Fragrant pines? It's like your average middling American haiku combined with your average first-person "I was out walking in nature and then had a sudden unearned epiphany at the end" poem that journals get inundated with.

Sure, you could probably do a good cinquain, but you could do the same thing or better with your own nonce form. I really think you can learn all you need to know about the cinquain from the name of its originator.



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