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Unread 04-24-2013, 12:16 PM
Graham King Graham King is offline
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I've (perhaps rashly) attempted to render Jabberwocky in monosyllables. I made no exceptions but did allow myself hyphenations such as 'snake-like' and 'blood-soaked'.
If brevity is the soul of wit I have failed, as it has ended up more than five times as long as the original; too long to post here!

The first two words " 'Twas brillig" had to expand to " 'Twas time to start to broil for tea" - there being no single-syllable synonym for 'brillig' that I know. Conveying even the word 'sundial' I found a considerable challenge; it is only now that I realise I could have avoided mention of it altogether and just have stuck with 'wabe' for the lawn surrounding it. But I've gone pretty much with Humpty Dumpty's unpacking of Carroll's other portmanteau words. For 'the Jabberwock' itself I have coined 'the Wock that Jabs its Burr', which seems to me in keeping with its anatomy and character.

So far, 'toves' alone I have not rephrased. For how to render lizard or badger in one syllable? (I may now try).
Checking, I have just found the word 'tove' to exist (possibly) outside Carroll, as a Scottish intransitive verb meaning 'to smoke or to emit a smoky smell' (tove, toved, toving, toves). I can fancy a plausible visual/etymological link: from a curl of smoke spiralling upwards to the corkscrewing snouts, tails and movements of the toves - as described by Carroll and illustrated by Tenniel.

Last edited by Graham King; 04-24-2013 at 12:53 PM. Reason: Replacing mistaken duplicate of my previous post with intended fresh one.
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