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Originally Posted by John Whitworth
You have to be quite old for this to work. Older than Lucy, I fear.
Olfactory
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School was sour milk and chalks and sweats.
The Odeon was cigarettes,
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Poor children smelled of poverty.
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I like that one, John! (Seemingly at 51 I'm old enough to get it.)
L9 though would scan more easily for me with a comma between milk and chalks, instead.
The last line deftly brings in a tougher poignancy.