No, Graham, stick with "Weird" it gets us off to a head-scratching sense of puzzlement. I really admired all of this. Very inventive and convincing without sentimentality. However, in the last line I felt that the smells, rather than thought, might have made their mark, say....
"but smells bring back that Fact'ry ev'ry day"
- and we could perhaps do with commas after strength and after job in the penultimate line.
Adrian, wicked and very neat indeed. Oscar would have loved it!
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