No, Marcus, I think VICTORIA GLORIA is better (vocative, don't you know; the whole thing is vocative, as it were)) and, for what it's worth, the lines make perfect sense
Hello John - I am surprised at this rare use of continuous apostrophe. If we concede the entire poem is in the vocative case then we are led to the conclusion that the person being addressed is Albert. Huge though this concession be, we can force sense into the words "Victoria gloria" only if they are attempting to mean that Albert is the glory of the Queen. Thus we must place the lady in the genitive - as I previously suggested. I proffer this advice in all humility, having taught Latin for quite a few years.
But your audacious rhymes are certainly eye-catching.
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