[Carolyn Moore]

Much agreement with previous responses. For example, I, too, appreciated the headlong rush of the chiefly anapestic second line to underscore the mad gallop to catch the bus. And I liked how slant rhyme kept several line endings from being too predictable.

Like a couple other responders, I missed the volta—especially missed it in the traditional spot between lines eight and nine. I need the volta early enough to turn the ocean liner of purpose around before a sonnet runs out. Also, I suspect we will see spots of padding for rhyme this week. One spot for me was “for mine.” It goes without saying that the speaker appropriated a brother’s discarded T-shirt “for mine.” Only if the recipient of the reclaimed T-shirt had been someone else might it have been necessary or simply interesting to indicate that fact.