Okay, so I feel like I fall roughly in the middle of the pack in terms of critique here. Claims that it is unrecognizable as a sonnet seem just a little bit hyperbolic and serve more to characterize the reader than the poem.
With respect to the meter, I find only a few lines use anything more than the standard metrical substitutions (anapests, trochaic foot starting the line, etc.). L7, however, made me stumble. The 12 syllables of L11 are a bit of a stretch but seem to work with the music of the piece, which I put on an equal footing with scansion, as I've seen lines that scan right but sound wrong and vice versa.
Did I miss the part of the discussion where a sonnet has to be grammatically correct? Fragments are perfectly acceptable to me as long as they are comprehensible, which this poem most certainly is. L6, "from the Goodwill bag for mine" was one place I felt that the syntax was molded around the rhymes.
Now, regarding the conceit of this poem: Childhood is presented in a series of iconic images but seems to have trouble escaping from the realm of cliche. For me, the slight at gender norms and (perhaps) biblical allusion did not up the ante enough, or perhaps dissipate too quickly to add much complexity. There just isn't enough at stake for me to feel the turn to responsibility of errands and schedules.
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