I like the poem itself, though if this wasn't a sonnet bake-off I wouldn't have recognised the form, as others have said.
I suspect that I might be the only Spherian to have a pet snake, so I love the notion of anyone happily letting a harmless snake slide across their hand - a thought that others abhor.
Again, as someone else remarked (I can't remember who, sorry,) my feeling is that if this had been posted on Metrical there would have been more suggestions for improvement than straightforward praise for it.
An interesting start to the bake-off, though I won't be voting for this one, and that's without having seen any of the others yet, simply because I'm a traditionalist and prefer more rigid adherence to the form.
Jayne
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