The writing is so assured and smart and fine, I'm completely seduced. And I go right along with it, and find it marvelous...and only with some effort can stir myself enough to wonder, what does line 4 actually mean? I really have no idea. (But it sounds so good!)
And why in line 2 are they getting undressed, right after waking, bathing, and eating, but before making dinner? (Clearly, it isn't for sex.) Is the time sequence just jumbled, because this same stuff is happening every day?
I could read "To soothe some dreamed-of other’s knocking chest," in the sense of "She touches him, as he's dreaming of somebody else's sexy knockers," or maybe "In a dream, she reaches out to soothe someone else's irregularly beating heart." It's a slick line, but maybe a touch unclear.
And along with Christine, I'm not sure how to take "Here are the things they thought they had to fear"--as in, they shouldn't have worried about those things, but something else instead? Or, they shouldn't have worried at all...?
But ah, it's so lovely, I can't worry about any of that. I'm swept along for the ride!
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