This is neat, well-crafted and nicely turned - yet the volta seems a bit too whimsical for a potentially heart-rending reality. In other words, it is too like the superficiality of the movie plots which form the heart of the trope - all very aptly scaled, if one wants to be positive - yet diminishing of the real lives evoked at the conclusion of the final couplet. Craft greatly admired - but, for me, the content playing well below the needed emotional strength.
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