L4 - "upped" - Besides fitting the meter and varying the cliché, I think the poet may intend some mild innuendo, suggesting "screwed their applecart" perhaps. Also, "upped" gets a lot of stress I think, which helps some to liven up the applecart image.
L13 - "cause" in this sense is a difficult word to use in a poem. " 'cause " is grammatical but doesn't look all that good. "cause" runs the risk of being mispronounced by the reader. "cuz" looks very bad, IMO. Perhaps:
"...nose. In my real life"
L13 - Note "real life" contrasted with. "reel life" (not explicit in the poem). Maybe not intentional, just natural language, but subliminally there, if only for some readers.
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