Great imagery here -- I'd revise these line for accuracy and meter's sake though ...
your trunks, the burning road-salt I.V. drip
of winter, the corner cuchifrito place
Common medical abbreviation is IV -- but I think any abbreviation jars a bit...the burning salt (saline solution) line is great though...how about
your trunks, the road-salt intravenous drip
that burns, the corner cuchifrito place
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