I have a guess about the author of this one! I agree that it cracks along very nicely up until line 13. (Sharon seems to have a point, but I would just write IV and have done with that line.)
No one has said this, so I could be totally off, but "snags" seems strange to me, unless there's an idiomatic use I'm unaware of. I guess everything listed in lines 1-12 is a "snag," metaphorically speaking, & perhaps it is fair to lump the speaker in with all the forces conspiring to bring about the trees' demise. But it sounds odd; it made me wonder if "nags" is really what was meant, (though that would be more fitting for the speaker than for everything else).
My other two problems have already been suggested; the break down of the subjunctive conditional statement in the last three lines (as Paul says, 'come April next' or some such would seem more appropriate), and that use of 'morn,' which I waver over, sometimes finding it a little fusty and embarrassing, but sometimes feeling that the poem, with its IV drip and cuchifrito place, etc., has earned the poeticism, that it suggests something of the trees' quixotic aspirations, which the poet, for all his grittiness and realism, is embarrassed to identify with. Having written it down, I feel that the poem gets away with the word; but the other two issues, 'snags' and 'this,' are still snags for me.
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