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Unread 07-19-2013, 11:33 AM
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Really good use of imagery. I don't see a lot of slant rhyme which makes cur/car stick out for me. The mixture of rough and high-blown diction is amusing in some places but threatens cacophony at times, like one of those movies where some 18th century Englishman is transported to a modern city and waxes poetic about a hot dog.

It's a bit of a shame to me that this is only the second piece with real lyric intensity, and it's done ironically.
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