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Unread 07-19-2013, 11:53 AM
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I like the intensity and imagery, but agree the ending needs a bit of work; not sure
that "snags" works--using Maryann's definition, it makes "the standing dead" redundant,
but more to the point, N has been a real literal observer, and switching suddenly to a metaphorical
description of N is distracting. I also am not overly fond of "morn", though it might grow on me
as a condensation of the last lines desperate romantic yearning.

Martin
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