Of course it's a sonnet. But I don't think it's a particularly outstanding one. It's one more occasional poem, from Tim, to Tim, about Tim, with a nod to God at the close. Been there, done that, read that - too often. There are some good lines (the last four), and some pedestrian lines (L3-L5) and cliches ("belching motor"), but little rework and tightening. You can write them with your eyes closed, Tim. What's next?
Last edited by Michael Cantor; 07-20-2013 at 07:20 AM.
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