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Unread 06-14-2006, 04:49 PM
Janet Kenny Janet Kenny is offline
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Sam,
In tight-lipped British it reads thusly:

when LYLE picked his PEN up to WRITE
the FLOOR fell QUIET as a CHURCH,
and ANN soon beGAN to exPLAIN
about FLOWers AND the DOOR FRAME
and MEN who had KNOWN the girl’s NAME.

( Line three could have "ANN SOON". I also can stress "AND" in the last line as well as, and with "MEN".)

I could do it some other dialects.

Janet

Here's a Latin American version:

when LYLE--PICKED his PEN up to WRITE
the FLOOR-- FELL-- QUIET as a CHURCH,
and ANN--SOON beGAN to exPLAIN
about FLOWERS--AND the DOOR--FRAME
AND MEN who had KNOWN the girl’s NAME.
~~
Or a version of dimeter with an odd line 4:

when LYLE picked his pen up to WRITE
the FLOOR fell quiet as a CHURCH,
and ANN soon began to exPLAIN
about FLOWERS and the DOOR frame
and MEN who had known the girl’s NAME.




[This message has been edited by Janet Kenny (edited June 14, 2006).]
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