Two of the best points made to date:
There is only one messenger of Pluto, not multiple ones… by Susan.
“For all his virtue” misleadingly suggests “in spite of his virtue” by Adam.
That's worth the price of tuition at your best universities!
Agent Double O Seven is generous with this translation and I can see why. It's quite a Procrustean bed on which to lie.
In terms of grading by a curve, this translation is perhaps among the more accomplished because of its difficulty. If it were fully polished, it would be a contender for best translation, hands down. Though more difficult translations may follow, this one will remain among them. I commend the translator, whose effort shows real spirit and daring.
I won’t rehearse what others have pointed out and it is apparent the translator will get the point after reading the critique offered to date. I think those bones have been gone over in a mere 6 posts. The translator will be greatly aided by these critiques, which makes the Translation Bakeoff one of the best times on line!
Thanks to the translator to dare to dare and to Agent Double O Seven for his/her understanding of that fact. The second draft will be a lot better.
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